http://scorpia-strikes.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] scorpia-strikes.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] sentential 2011-08-24 04:41 pm (UTC)

This was lovely. Honestly.

And that Robb came back, only to be with Jon, and it wasn't anything creepy attached to it. Like, no climbing out of the grave, nor becoming a vampire, nor a werewolf, nor Jon being dead and Robb was there to take him to heaven - he just came back.

And the descriptions, and Jon's pain and relief when Robb came back. And I liked that you made Jon an adopted child - it takes away that creepy brothers-by-blood thing that is always there, no matter how used to it you are and how much you read it.

Great job, and thanks for sharing!

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